A small edit you can make which leads to crisper writing — get rid of the “wills”

As I have said before, writing is about two things — 1. creating, which is just letting thoughts flow on paper or screen — and 2. editing, which is revising what you have created to fit the purpose of the writing (an op-ed would be edited very differently from a scholarly white paper, e.g.). So creating is natural, and editing is cultural (you fit the writing into what the culture needs). I learned this years ago, when I took a class in the Theory of Writing.